The Works of Chad A. Strong

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Monday, July 31, 2006

Gardok and Hemsho (working title)

Gardok. Gardok is the name of a wonderful boy; a boy whose 16th birthday was only a week away. Gardok had lived his entire life living in a beautiful lush forest. He lived at home with his “mother”. Mother never believed in keeping secrets from the ones you love. So the fact that she had found him when he was a baby wandering in the forest alone had always been something they could talk about. Gardok loved his mother dearly and helped her any way that he could.
As Gardok walked happily down the trail, he saw one of his friends looking down a hole in the ground...and at the bottom of this hole was a bright sparkly light.
Gardok walked up to his friend and said, "Hemsho, what are you staring at?"
Hemsho did not reply. Gardok tapped him lightly on the shoulder to get his attention. Hemsho turned around swiftly and was breathing very heavily...
"I didn't hear you," said Hemsho to Gardok.
"I was just going for a walk when I heard this beautiful music coming from this hole in the ground."
Gardok hadn't realized it before, but he too could hear a strange melodious tune coming from deep within the land.
"What do you suppose it is?" asked Hemsho.
"I don't know!" Gardok whispered.
"Want to go and check it out?" Hemsho said.
Gardok sort of shook his head and told Hemsho that he was headed to the market to buy some things for his mother and that she was probably expecting him back soon.
So, Hemsho and Gardok decided that it would probably be a good idea to just forget about the music and the hole.
When Gardok got back home he felt he should tell his mother what he had seen, but for some reason he said nothing.
Gardok's mother finished making their soup and they both sat down to eat. When Gardok had finished his dinner he asked to be excused from the table. He headed straight up to his room and went to bed, but he just couldn't get that music out of his head.
That night he dreamed that he jumped down the hole. He fell for what felt like an eternity, but before he reached the bottom of the hole he was awoken by Hemsho.
"Hemsho, what are you doing in my room? In the middle of the night no less?" Gardok screamed.
Hemsho told Gardok that he just had a dream that he jumped into the hole.
"What? I just had that exact same dream." Gardok said.
Hemsho looked at Gardok with a look of wonder in his eyes, "I think we should go and see what is down that hole."
"Okay." Gardok blurted before he even thought about what Hemsho was saying.
So they quietly sneaked out of the house. As soon as they stepped outside the music that they had been thinking about all night became very, very prominent in the still air of the night.
"That music is so beautiful," said Hemsho. "I have never heard anything like it before."
Gardok didn't want to tell Hemsho this but he felt that he HAD heard that music before. It was as if the music was a part of him. As they neared the part of the forest where the hole was...the music stopped.
Gardok and Hemsho just looked at one another in a look that said, "I will keep going if you do!"
So Gardok took another step forward and Hemsho soon followed.
Finally they could see the hole and the light in the bottom of it seemed to shine up into the sky like a giant flashlight and they wondered why they had never seen this light before.
They bent down over the hole listening intently for a sign of the music. They waited......and waited.
After about twenty minutes of waiting...they heard a sound. It wasn't the music but a voice.
"Gardok! Hemsho! We need your help...quickly. We need y........" The voice vanished as quickly as it had come.
"Did you hear that?" Hemsho screamed. "Whatever is down there KNOWS our names. How is that possible?"
Hemsho started pacing around, "Gardok, how do they know are names?" But no answer came.
"Gardok? GARDOK?? Where are you?"
Hemsho leaned over the hole and as the light came into view he saw the silhouette of Gardok falling deeper and deeper into the hole.
Hemsho leaped into the hole...for he knew his friend would need his help.

2 Comments:

Blogger Dezaree said...

ooooo!!! This is interesting. REALLY. I am anxious to find out what in the heck is down that hole. Let me know when you have more.

8/01/2006 1:00 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

I liked it the first time, and I like it now. I have to give my "honest, constructive criticism" a little more thought and who the heck are you talking about doing illustrations?

8/02/2006 8:59 PM  

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